This was an interesting poem. It was written in a quicker pace. At times it seemed rushed and like the rhythm was forced but it all came together and wasn't bad.

Thats so sad but so sweet at the same time and i really enjoyed your title..great work!!

melissa

I really love this but there are things that need some fixing the repitition on the OO sound got kind of old mix it up a bit and get some synanyms it will sound a lot better and give it a special touch nice job tho