Unfamiliar Reflection

by Tammie   Apr 4, 2007


As she stares blankly in the mirror
The reflection is unfamiliar
A pathetic picture perfect image in her mind
Fading away at the sight of her unknown self

Who is she? Scars on her legs and wrists
Why are they there? Hidden emotion expressed in her eyes
This strange girl, so different to what she used to be
What brings on such a change to someone so beautiful?

The smile on her once happy face, the gleam in her eyes
Not a trace left behind to be seen
She is disappearing behind her facade
But that is beginning to fail too

The girl falls to her knees, finally breaking down
Tears falling like rain in a drought
A crack appears in the old hazy mirror
Spreading, with pieces falling, cutting the girls hand

She sits and cries, with blood stained skin
As reason clouds her eyes, she gently falls to the floor
Shallow is her breath as she takes her last gasp
This once cheerful beauty died of a broken heart.

* Okay, so I haven't written in three months as I've had writters block. It has been so frustrating, but this is what I got out of attempting to write something tonight. I hope it's alright. Any critique would be much appreciated. Also, this is probably just a temporary title for the poem, I couldn't think of one, so help with that would be great also. Thanks. =] *

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  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This was an extremely heartfelt piece, despite it's saddening theme. It gave off a solid feeling of despair and bleakness, which I like being strongly conveyed in poetry.

    "The smile on her once happy face, the gleam in her eyes
    Not a trace left behind to be seen
    She is disappearing behind her facade
    But that is beginning to fail too"

    ^ I loved this stanza, especially the last two lines.

    Excellent work.

  • 17 years ago

    by BECLiKEW0AHH

    Sad but brilliant.
    I wish i could write like that when having writers block hahaa =]]
    Great use of words, I could picture everything you were saying.
    5/5
    Bekkah.x

  • 17 years ago

    by Katie

    This poem is very well written. Great use of words, and description. I loved it. I could picture every sene so well. Awesome job.

    Thanks for the comment by the way. :]

  • 17 years ago

    by The Angel of Secrets

    Sad, yet beautiful. Youre a great writer, no doubt about it.

    The Angel of Secrets

  • 17 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Aw... that was so sad!! i loved it though and you still are a super awesome writer.

    i think you should leave the title, i likes it.

    5/5
    Allanah

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