A great poem but a little mind boggling cos the lines were so similar..i advise you this to change
Other than that,you showed real emotions
It was great
Keep it up
Sincerely,
Laura

Very beautiful poem...loved it....the style u chose for this 1 was good...lol...u portrayed emotions well thru this 1....great work!..
Kp writing!
Good job!5/5!
xxPoojaxx

This is a good poem I like the way you repeated some line ;) the emotions was raw well done! Flow was good good job!

I love this one