Beauty in the Unwinning Battle

by skynerraw   Apr 4, 2007


I calm my anger, by punching pillows
The trees around me vibrant willows
I spin and spin
To lose thought of this battle I cannot win

The battle making me lose my hope
But I will not turn around and mope
I look around at the falling leaves
Then look at the torn trees

Angry thieves stole their beauty
So they cannot complete their duty
They're burned and cut
Their wounds will never shut

They are not unlike me
Who will never be free
I scream aloud
No one to hear, my fear lost in this cloud
Of desperate pain
I'm not using my brain

The falling leaves of this spring time bloom
Is where my hope lies in this doom
That will not leave me any eternity near
Just holds in my fear

The birds tweet and scream aloud
They are bold and proud
I wish I was
But what does
This vibrant beauty mean
It is meant to be seen

As I spin and spin
In this loss for the hope to win

*-Sky-*

I actually think this is one of my better poems, but I'm not sure:D so please tell me what you think! This one was inspired to me by the woods surrounding my house!

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  • 17 years ago

    by David

    Ah i think this has a lot of potential. this flowed well and the message and story it told was so cool.

    5/5 David

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I liked this. I liked the overall flow. You had a good useage of vocabulary. It kinda creates this image in teh readers head. A good read like that. The structure could of been improved htough. I really liekd the reptiiton of "I spin and spin". The title of the poem makes the reader intrested in what the poem is about. Unwinning battle and beaty dont go togerther. Loved how you did that. I htpought you should of used punctuation as it would of helped the reader read the poem liek you wanted it to be read. Keep it up! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I think this is a really great poem loved how you portrayed this it was really well written and had a great meaning across it! Well done on this poem a great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    I think it's definitly one of your better poems!! nice job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Molly

    This was good.... U got ur award! good job! ttul

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