This is a really interesting poem. I'm not too sure what to say about it, but I like it. There is so much raw emotion expressed. Well done. =]

Tammie

Collabs are always great. They hold different meanings for everone involved which in turn takes the poem on a different twist with every verse.

This is interesting. I am sure that your sister will always appreciate the fact that you take the time to write with her.

--Sher

The emotions were well put out in this poem. There were some parts that seemed to go off a little but other than that this was a good poem. Keep writing!

` Liz =]

I liked this David!! You and your sister did a grand job! There were so many excellent words I just loved this poem keep it up

Aww you wrote it with your sister thats so nice :) all my siblings are older than me and are always off at partys now leaving me home lonesome so im sure your sister liked spending time with you

it was very interesting you can tell that when you write with your sister it gets a different twist to it than your normal work and i luv it all the same lols

5/5
<3 kiara

This is an interesting poem David. It is good that you can come up with a poem with your sister. It was a good read.5/5

Kalee

How great to write with your sister. I've done several collabs and always enjoy doing them. Keep writing....good work. Debbie

Very nice poem, indeed...
keep on writing...

*isabel*

Interesting poem, Had a nice twist to it. Good job.

Very good i kinda laughed at the end just the way you said it but i loved it well done 5-5