I really liked this one ^_^ The flow was fantastic and your choice of words was great also =) 5/5 Hands down =) I knew that you'd be good just by your name lols Anyone with the name Lance has to be a good guy lols
Rhea

I like this one becouse it flows and it doesnt feel like you tried to hard to make it rhyme. I love it becouse it was written in the truth of life. Great job!