This poem is really interesting. It is another breath of fresh air from your other poems.

I felt that his poem lacked the heart that the others had. There were points where there were a lot of grammar errors.

To win or loss,

It should be "To win or lose, "

The flow was up and down, it went from 4-6 syllables to about 10-15 syllables.

I think that this poem is really unique. I enjoyed the read and feel that there should be more of these types of poems around, different from the cliche type.

Very well done.
4/5

I think this poem was good,
but kinda of confusing, but i understood what you meant, and wat not. so i give you a 4/5.

I thought this wasn't brilliant, the flow was rocky throughout the last 3 stanza's, and overall the structure was great, though it lacked emotion, I suggest and only suggest that you cut down on the line length, and remove some fillers.
There were some good things like the opening stanza and the structure.
Good job
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