The Messenger {Trijan Refrain}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Apr 5, 2007


Oh, a Heaven of Destiny,
Promised me a kind hand,
To lift me up so I could see,
All truths across the lands.
Find my true faith is what I need,
A silent prayer as I agreed.
....Find my true faith.
....Find my true faith.
Find my true faith is what I need.

A messenger was sent to me,
With a shine in his eyes.
"Tell me your wish," he'd said with glee,
"I want to learn to fly!"
"Would you believe what you can't ignore?"
"Just pray and you'll get your reward."
"...Would you believe?"
"....Would you believe?"
"Would you believe what you can't ignore?"

"Messenger," I asked with dismay,
Hoping he'd understand,
"Could I speak to my God today?"
He slipped me a kind hand;
"Have hope and pray," is all he said,
With a gentle kiss to my head.
"....Have hope and pray."
"....Have hope and pray."
"Have hope and pray," is all he said.

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The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line
at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.
The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Congrats on trying a poetry style that is one of the most difficult that I've ever read before. I loved the poem but I didnt really like all of that repitation in it. Although you did a great job in distracting me with the message and all of the beautiful images that it represented. Nice work.

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    First of all i want to say well done i actually pulling off this poetry style. It's not the easiest to do i've tried but failed lol.

    Secondly: i really did love the repetition it gave this poem an extra spark. Really creative.

    Third: you made it interesting and kept me wanting to read this from start to end. And it is hard to keep my attention on one thing.

    &

    Fourth: I loved the flow it seemed to flow very well i didnt see any errors throughout this.

    Well done on a great job hun. Loved this poem it definitly deserves a wonderful 5/5
    ~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    So I didn't like the rhyme scheme too much. It was a little too much repetition for me. Yet, I loved the message. It was nice.

    4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Infected with His Deadly Love

    This poem really speaks to the reader. I loved it. I've never seen a Trijan Refrain poem before. You done good.
    Keep it up 5/5

    :Sarah:

  • 17 years ago

    by Kurt

    This was an interesting poem. The rhyming was smooth for the most part and the style was unique. I enjoyed reading this and i liked the special power it seemed to hold.

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