Wow, that's good! I know it's not finished yet, but I had to comment on it just now. It's really powerful, despite it still being quite short. It really makes the reader think. The flow and rhyming are also very well done.

This is gorgeous, and it's not even finished!!!
i can't wait till it is, but even now it is beautiful, your poems are so strong, keep it up. gabriella

It's really good. Keep up the good work!
5/5

~Chelsea