This is really good..and so sad. =[

but i liked it...and the repeatition worked for this one..nice job.5/5

thanx for the enjoyable read!

Nice ending. I'm not sure I get it. This was a really powerful read, like those things you see in bulletins all the time. Amazing work!

I loved this, it flowed well, and the repetition of "sorry mom" added to the whole emotion of the poem. you have talent
love Tara-Kay
x

Really different then what i'm used to from you to tell you the truth. I liked this though i'm more keen on your vivider word choice. They seem much deeper to me. This was a great poem none the less quite sad with a twist at the end. Overall a good read.~Mel

Beautiful poem! You sure can write! Very touching piece and so sad....you did a great job on this one!!!!!!! 5/5

Awww good job!!! this one is really sad and flowed pretty good. some points had bumps but it was great! also, some of they rhyming seem forced like you couldn't think of anyother word. but overall it was really good!!!! keep up the good work! :o)

I found this to be incredibly sad, and yet so beautifully written at the same time.

The emotion and depth you portrayed in this was overwhelming, without being overbearing, it really tugs on the reader's heartstrings.

The only thing I didn't like about this was that you rhymed ''to'' with ''to.''

But apart from that, I thought this was beautifully written, filled with such melancholy and still such a beautiful piece of writing.

You are really talented!
This is the second poem I am reading by you and it stands out too! What a gifted young man you are!!

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

Wow!..great job!!..lots of emotion in it..i totaly cried......
tear..
great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
5/5
;)
***aLy***