by debbylyn
How very sad. This poem has a good flow and rhyme scheme...well written...keep writing! 5/5 Debbie |
by malina
Omg...you write such great powerful poems.. |
Excellent. well written. 5/5 |
by Rattlehead
Nice poems your a really good poet nice work. |
Wow.. a well written poem indeed.. keep up the gud work! |
by 19Rusty
Excellent poem. You can really see a boy in this situation. |
by MaSkEdSoUl
Wow that was very sad and touching. It had a great flow. 5/5 |
Wow. |
"A poor lost soul, stranded on the streets |
by June
That sent a shiver right through me ,it was so well written ,your really have a great talent for writting ,please do keep it up as I will be looking forward to future writes. |
by Marc Ortiz
Poor kid. :| I love your poem.. I felt the boy's misery.. 5/5! |
I really liked your poem. It is hard to remain positive when faced with a negative reality. As a caregiver this poem really touched me. |
This poem is really good I love it its one of the best I ever read |
by Perfection
Yes this was one of your better poems, Good story as well as a good topic, nice structure and rhyming and you did stay on track while rhyming so thats a pluss.. |
by Mary Howe
That gave me chills and brought tears to my eyes good stuff i'll be looking for more |
by Katt Baker
I love it. What really gets to me is that there are kids out there in the world without anyone who'll give a care about them. I knwo this may be really corny and all, but I hope that one day there will be a way to help them in their times of neediness. |
by Jezzika
WOW!!! I love it... it's an amazing piece of work! You did a amazing job... the flow was great and everything just fit so nicely... 5/5 all the way!! |
by Hatori
*Tear* This poem is incredible!! The ryhming was superior and I loved it completely. I don't know what to say. You are a gifted poet and I look forward to reading other poems of yours. The first part was my favorite though, and the ending complemented it. Brilliant piece of work, 5/5! |
Awesome poem! so full of emotion and bringing to focus one of society's many faults. keep writin'. 5/5 |
by Corruption
Wow awesome job i liked this one more then the wind one i found this one addressed life problems more and i respect anything like that so this is wonderful awesome job and thx again for the comments |