We're Going Down

by KeyxMashingxParody   Apr 5, 2007


We're going down,
Like never before.
We're losing grip,
And hitting this hard, cold floor.

We're suffocating,
In this disgusting world.
We're done hoping,
On every little joy.

We're falling forever,
This path we chose has no end.
We'll never die,
Yet our souls will never descend.

We're screaming insanely,
The world is deaf.
We're never calm,
Even after our last breath.

We're all bugging,
After the drugs.
Always looking,
For someone to bug.

We call out for help,
When we don't help others.
Outcasts always,
Even from dear old mother.

We're going down,
Like never before.
We're losing grip,
And hitting this hard, cold floor.

We'll hit the bottom,
But we will not get up.
We'll lie in pain for eternity,
Our lives weren't that rough.

We beg on our backs,
And plea on our knees.
And feel a bloody sensation,
As if being stung by bees.

We'll panic in society,
And never say never again.
And like our short little lives,
Our promises have no ends.

We lie like there is no tomorrow,
And live like there's no yesterday.
We give up to religion,
And count on God for everything we pray.

We can't even control ourselves,
Yet we can control someone else.
And like the book I once referred to,
It has finally fallen from the shelf.

That book was our history,
One filled with hate and gore.
I ask you now and forever,
Please, tell me this isn't what we're for?

We're going down,
Like never before.
We're losing grip,
And hitting this hard, cold floor.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wow this poem was very long and i didnt even notice till after i was done because it was just that good

  • Good poem. I liked the pun in this poem. And I liked the way you repeated the lines:

    'We're going down,
    Like never before.
    We're losing grip,
    And hitting this hard, cold floor.'

    Good job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    Alot of emotion.
    Very well written.
    The flow was nice.
    5/5

    ~Chelsea

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I liked the emotional side to this poem, the flow was great..but yet some of the rhymes felt forced as I read them. Your rhymes need to feel a little more free in poetry or it takes away from the quality. I did love the imagery and emotion though, great work.

    "We're going down,
    Like never before.
    We're losing grip,
    And hitting this hard, cold floor. "

    ^^ I loved the repetition of those lines.

    (:

  • 17 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Amazing poem great flow, I loved how you repeated these lines:

    "We're going down,
    Like never before.
    We're losing grip,
    And hitting this hard, cold floor."

    Keep it up! 5/5