by KeyxMashingxParody Apr 5, 2007
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
We're going down, |
by Kaila
Wow this poem was very long and i didnt even notice till after i was done because it was just that good |
Good poem. I liked the pun in this poem. And I liked the way you repeated the lines: |
Alot of emotion. |
I liked the emotional side to this poem, the flow was great..but yet some of the rhymes felt forced as I read them. Your rhymes need to feel a little more free in poetry or it takes away from the quality. I did love the imagery and emotion though, great work. |
by MaSkEdSoUl
Amazing poem great flow, I loved how you repeated these lines: |