Friendship can bless and it can hurt. good writing, good poetry

your servant:
david

I like how you use the words rewind, pause, play and fast forward to tell what that person said and what you want to know, I hope you get what I'm trying to say lol anyways I liked. Keep it up.

Friends: the pleasure or hurt of life.
You did very well on this.
Keep it up
D.L

Despite the choppy flow, which is the first thing I noticed when I opened this to read it, I actually REALLY liked this. It held depth and raw emotion, and it had great imagery and vocabulary. I actually really liked the rewind, play, fast forward lines; which I didn't think I would because they didn't flow, but they really tied the poem together. One thing though, in the line, "Do you think I'll leave theses thoughts alone?" .. theses should be these. Other than that, AMAZING job Darling.

5.5

Lovely! <33
5/5