Wasn't what I expected to read, but I wasn't let down. It was cute, but still a little cliched, I don't know...you're still very young and have a lot of time to improve but I just think you should try to write some ideas down and then put it together after or something so it doesn't seem so cliched...don't get me wrong, I did like it, there was just something sorta off about it. But you are good though. (:

The flow was a little off but it can easily be fixed if you count your syllabols

The whole poem portrayed the feeling of a lost love and the yearning to have it back..
Well done sweets
5/5
*Gem*

I liked this poem.
Your good at writing these kind of poems.
well done.
5/5

~Chelsea

The feelings portrayed in this one were heartbreaking - about losing someone you love. The flow was a bit off - but overall, it was wonderful. Keep it up! 5.5

Stephaine Lynn .+.