Ok first you rhyme to and you together a lot maybe try to mix the words up a bit and you'll be good I hope your new relationship works out

I thought this was pretty good. I'm new at poetry, but I liked it a lot. Well done.

Even though you mislead people with your age on your profile which i hate. good writing on this poem

your servant:
david

Omgsh wowo that poem was so perfect, the rhyme the tone...everything. above all the truness of your heart, your gurl is so lucky to have you..wow. this really is amamzing and ur a wonderful writer...so talented. i look forward to reading more. keep it up. 5/5

melissa

This poem was really good. Good job.

Pamela:)

Awesome!!! I wish I had a guy as sweet as you and that could so true. Or like you stated in your poem... it's not my moment.