I found this poem was a bit hard to read. It didn't flow very well, in my opinion. If you tried breaking it up into stanzas and using a more steady meter it would improve the pome quite a bit. I did like the last two lines of the poem, kind of reminded me of a Shakespearean sonnet, with a rhyming couplet at the end.

--Steph

Like I said earlier the flow was a bit off but just count the syllabols and try to make the lines match up it will have a better rhythm as well

Good!

I thought the flow was fine, it all depends on how you read it..

"Laying here in my bed,
Staring at my ceiling.
So many thoughts running through my head,
I'm thinking, when will my broken heart start healing?"

The opening four lines is something that i think every girl has done, i know i have =)
5/5
*Gem*

Wow.
That was a very emotional & sad poem to read. =[
The flow was good, the word usage was fantastic, and the emotions were clear & strong.

"Laying here in my bed,
Staring at my ceiling.
So many thoughts running through my head,
I'm thinking, when will my broken heart start healing?"

^ My favorite lines & a wonderful way to open up the poem. Wonderful job, keep it up! =]
5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.