I ttly kno where you're coming from...just stick it out & things will work out in the end. Good job on the poem

Well this is a pretty good poem stepn, there are a few things you could fix but overall this is a good poem, i will give you some advice, dont put commas in the middle EX)

When I open my mouth,
things come out,

this should be
When I open my mouth
things come out,

but its still a 5/5!! keep up the good job, check out my newest poem and tell me if u like it!!!

"non of my lies exists" (sic) (= None is mispelled in the line.)

Other than the technical errors, you've written another fine piece of poetry. Yes, I do believe adjusting [not only the end but also] the whole poem will make a tremendous difference.
Loved it otherwise.
Love,
Debbie

I've read quite a few poems of yours, and i like them, the flow is well formed and its real easy vocab, so i understand what you are saying. I don't think having extreme vocab is the way to a masterpiece, or not enough vocab, just writing that is well-structured, heartfelt and easy to interpret, and you did that, so well done love.
kaitlynx.

Great, you have done a wonderful job in this poem...... very unique word choice and great emotion.
i have always said, you are truly talented. keep it up

"Do you know what i see,
when I close my eyes?
Me trapped in a web of lies."

Capitalize the "i", and perhaps fix the last line. I don't think it goes well with that stanza...it's the "Me" that ruined it.

"When I open my mouth
things come out,
not the way they
were meant to say."

Again, it's the last line...'tis the "say" that ruined it.

"I never planned any of this,
none of my lies exists
It wasn't meant to happen this way,
Why wont you listen to what I have to say?"

You suddenly decided to rhyme here, and that's not something I like in a poem.

Not the rhyming, but mixing a poem with no rhymes with rhymes...and apparent ones at that.

"I want to tell the truth,
if we make a truce
forget all that I said,
Forget every tear that has been shed."

The worst stanza in the whole poem, and I, as a reader, dislike poems that ends badly.

Most definitely. Fix that.

3/5

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

If we make a truce
^Not very fond of this line. I think you should change that.
Still, needs work on the flow bit shaky.

It's a pain to hear lies from your friends. Very good friendship poem. Just keep up writing and you will get better as you write.
God Bless 5/5
<3Tay(^__^)

Hrmm very different and unique which I like. The flow was a bit off do to the way you worded somethings, however, it was meant to be like that with a pause, therefore it was ok. Overall great write with a unique style.

Peace, Joe

I think it was a good poem, and the ending.. well, I didn't like the rhyming BUT I did like the lines, eh. You did another good write. Keep it up, hun.

Hey!...i guess this 1 is ur best till nw..i loved it!...didn't find many errors..lol....this is indeed a Great write frm u!...Well done!..
Sure 5/5!
xxPoojaxx

I liked this poem, but not my favorite. I think your message was a great one, Keep writing, it'll only make ya improve. =) 4/5
~Ally~

Yes leave it like this. I really like this. I feel like i've lied to someone and am reaping the consequences. The poem doesn't need closure because closure comes from the other person forgiving.

I think you should leave it like this.
I actually like it, and I have a way of doing poems for my contests that are held.. I think, since I like it but don't know what to say, that I'll do that with this one.

Here it goes:
Capitalization: -3/100
Punctuation: -3/100
Spelling: -0/100
Flow:-0/100
Like: -0/100
Overall: Great poem!

Poem: -6+2=96/100.

^ I divide 100 by 5 for the first 5 things graded, and the number of words used as a postive or negative thing at the end are added or taken away from the overall grade.
And a 92 or up is a 5.
so you have a 5/5
Lol. :/

5/5 for definate. an honest poem. i like it..good flow and rhyme =] nice work. hmm i aint really sure if i feel there is something missing. maybe if you added more detail. explained the lie or something. otherwise, its quite nice and cute to me =]
nuff luv xx

I liked it, it was honest which was good. There isnt much detail and emotion, which leaves it a little empty but a good poem none the less
love Tara-Kay

Great poem, flow was good and wording was great ,few little nic's and nac's but over all great poem, all tho I would forget the tears I shed and make everything all better, if it happened once , twice you can bet it will happen again and again, great write , your friend Tracy dean 5/5 good luck sweetie

I think that this is a great poem and if fine just the way it is. I really liked it. Everything was great. I gave it a 5/5.

Uhm it was a good poem, I like your other poems more - sorry. Flow was good and again it was simple but straight to the point. good job!

That's a great poem....I have no words to express how much i hate lies...but you could do it...congratulations.Take good care of you.Best regards,XxXx

5/5 i like this poem and i think its fine just the way it is : ) i wouldnt change it