The dance

by Independence Forever   Apr 6, 2007


The petals swirl in a circle not realizing the pains
as the dance begins your life slows and drains

death comes even slower the petals gliding gracefully
you see your life flash, you know you will die peacefully

if this is death, it is a happy alternative to life
so beautiful an end, you are happy at your strife

the petals dance, the trees sway, all nature saluting you
if this is the ending then how can i worry, nature's hue

the eyes darken but the dance grows stronger
you only wish you could watch it a little longer

the petals swirl, a bittersweet symphony for your ears
the pain of death is not registering, only happy tears

complete the dance, end the long life with petals glide
a happy ending, now it's time to meet life's other side

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  • 16 years ago

    by Bare My Paradox

    This is a awesome piece of work...the feeling is displayed incredibly...love it !

  • 16 years ago

    by monica

    Wow yet agian with the endings haha they rock

  • 17 years ago

    by Marjan

    AMH,
    I liked the happy spirit in this poem.

    Now, let's have a talk on my favorite line:

    "the petals dance, the trees sway, all nature saluting you"
    It's called looking through another's eyes. Something I've always been interested in. to know how others watch the things move. They say "beauty is in the eyes of the beholder". And how well they say it. That’s why I read poems. it's like borrowing someone’s eyes for a few minutes. Yours at the time you wrote this, wanted to see everything dance. Aye, the death too can dance and look majestic. This however is a little dangerous, for it may tempt us, the readers to want to give death a hug and a hug may always go a little further.
    So the lesson behind this, is: Don't hug death, unless it hugs you first 8-]

    Marjan

  • 17 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    I like your description and the materials u used (all about nature). . you nicely portray a contrast of serenity in each words with the dark settings in here. great work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Roxy

    Ahh!! I am truly running out of words to say, I have this huge smile on my face lol that sounds so queer. Amazing poem once again you are going onto my favorite authors!! Amazing I tell you!! xxx Much love from Roxy

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