So sad i can feel the pain in your words
5.5

kristin

"I loved you but you left
So now I am alone
Because I loved you to much
Now I have nothing to loan"
Most of the rhymes here sound forced, but this one is the worst of all. It makes no sense, and...ugh. Sorry, honey, try again.

Nothing to loan as in the heart was to loan but he had broken it and you can loan somthing broken

so i wont try again not being nasty ..

Can't emphasis just how lovely this poem really is, nicely written

Honey, I wasn't being nasty.
I was being honest.
There is a difference.

Okies soz i get wound up fast

soz

x

I really like this poem. Even though its really sad. But i like sad. Anyway nice poem. I like the way you worded it too.

"Even the hardest heart
Can shatter into bits
Showing of the scars
On both of my wrists"

That was beautiful.