Comments : Something short of a broken dream

  • 17 years ago

    by Poetic Grunt

    If I may make a suggetion...
    Instead of dream twice...
    maybe a "see what you've done to me" or
    "this is something I wish you could see"
    but over all alright job 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    I like this!

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    The flow is alittle off but it is a grea write and your a great poet keep it up,
    nessa