This was different but I loved it. Very well written.

Wow this is the first time iv seen this type of writing but i could feel it and see it it wuzz amizing 5/5

This is a really good poem, it lets u go wit it.....

It is pretty good, however there are a few questions and mistakes I would like to point out. Did you mean to change from stanza form to like...sentences? A few gramatical errors and some spelling mistakes...but it was alright. Maybe you ought to edit it...reformat it, just so it's not so confusing to the random reader, not just the people who read your stuff all the time. It was alright... fix those few things...unless you meant for them to be there, in which case just ignore this whole comment, and I would give you a 5/5, right now you get a 4/5
~Forever Me~
***Danielle***

Wow, this is amazing

Wow very different!
i love this one alot 7/5
keep it up k!