Comments : The Truth about Easter

  • 17 years ago

    by KaYkAy

    That was very powerful.. its great to read things abt god :) great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    In answer to Snugglez, the easter egg this is pagan ritual.
    In response to your poem, it's very powerful and tells a very cute story so many people can understand it, you don't use complicated words to get your point across which is great.
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Lenny

    Uh-oh look out its CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM! (then I'll get to the greatness of it)

    Kay, the last line in the first stanza. Needs another syllable to keep the flow up. Such as.... '...nailed to cross...' or '...upon the cross...'

    A few more syllables in the last two lines of the third stanza, or a few less in the first two...

    And I'd cut 'Even' out of the last stanza so it reads:

    'Once again thank you, Jesus
    Though I can not repay you in anyway
    I guess the only thing I can do
    Is celebrate Easter the right way.

    And yeah, otherwise t'riffic as usual. Beautiful theme, topic, message, explains the whole Easter scenario simply and interestingly!
    Rhyme wasn't cliched. Great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Leah

    Wow, that is really good,

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    Beautiful! I loved this one as well. 5/5