THIS IS A BAD POEM BUT AM NOT AFRAID TO DIE

Good poem. The flow wasn't bad and the lines trasitioned smoothly. However, you could improve the flow by removing filler words and enhancing certain vocab. Other than that minor suggestion, you did a good job.

This was a great poem.. you explained the feeling so well many of us out tehre are affraid to die, and you went into detail why, whithout loosing the great flow of your poem. great job..
kirsty
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HEY LOOK I DINT MEAN THAT ITS A BAD POEM YOU MISUNDERSTOOD I MEANT THAT IT WAS BAD.BAD ITS JUST A SLANG WORD FOR LIKE ITS KOOL
AND I USE THE WORD BAD LIKE THIS.
I REALLY THINK YOUR GOOD AT WRITTING POEMS. I DONT JUST WRITE FOR THE HELLA OF IT.THEY COME FROM THE HEART.AND THATS HOW I FEEL.

Beautifull ... dark ... chilling

This was a very nice write. It flowed very well, and the meaning was even more profound. I liked how you expressed your speaker's desperation, her fear, because I could feel it. It's a topic most of us think about sometime. Very well done, I loved it.

This has so much relevance!! i think it's something everyone thinks about... i know i do.