A nice write, could have some changes, but i liked your flow, nice job.

Loved your poem!

Wow this poem is really really sad yet very emotional. I loved the flow of it, it was flawless. I liked the description you used to de4scribe yourself in the first stanza it worked well. i really liked the black eyeliner and how youve described yourself, giving yourself this kinof "Emo" look, yet youve shown the pain your going through in it. To improve i suggest you use more punctuation. Thank you for your comment on my work. keep writing! xx