by skynerraw Apr 8, 2007
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Love, romance /
lost love
Its midnight bliss |
by Melpomene
Ok, The flows off in this poem mainly because some of your lines are shorter and some are longer making the syllable count off. If you made the lines have a similar amount of syllables throughout it then it would flow more evenly. Hope that helps you a little bit. Well done though~mel |