In Pieces.

by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG   Apr 9, 2007


Red and blue colored the empty street,
As the men in blue entered apartment 403,
The smell of whiskey tainting their nose,
Hidden in a vase with one black rose --

The desolate suite grew quiet and cold,
As one man through a walkie-talkie was told,
To look in the bedroom and he will find,
The remainder of a love she left behind.

Black and white pictures scattered along the floor,
Smiling faces forced to watch such gore,
A trail of blood leading out the window,
Scattered between footprints encased in snow.

Inside a deserted car, there lay a woman,
Wondering where her boy has been,
And in pieces, she fell with grace,
With a hand print imprinted across her face.

And on a card between the roses thorns,
Was a tiny note from one wife terribly scorned,
But between the lines, scribbled in blue;
Were three little words -- 'I love you'.

- Jenna Elphick
April 9, 2007

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  • 17 years ago

    by isabel

    Wonderful poem...

    *isabel*

  • 17 years ago

    by Kurt

    This poem had great flow and the rhyming scheme was well executed. The first stanza's last line was a bit out of place. It seemed like it was placed there to force the rhyme. Othere than that the only other suggestion i have is that woman and been don't rhyme and are the only parts really keeping the flow from being perfect. Still, this was brilliantly written and easily a 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is perhaps one of the best poems ive read of yours, the ending stanza sends chills up my back!! wish i could give it a higher vote than 5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Great job Jenna! You entered this for the contest... I had to back out. Really sad story...
    Fav line:
    The remainder of a love she left behind.

    just sounded really poetic!
    keep it up hun!

    Ciao~