I like that this poem has rhyming, but that it's obviously not the main purpose. It has a very interesting, little done topic, which also makes it fun to read.

My favorite parts were the first three stanzas, and the last one. The 4th seemed to lose some steam... as if you were trying to find a way to carry the poem through to a conclusion, but didn't really know how. it seemed a little stiffer, and didn't have quite the creativity of the rest.

Besides that, there were just the weird black diamonds, and a couple of "out's" that should have been "our's." But with the new and improved edit feature, that should be no problem!

This was a cool piece. I liked the name, and the content.

"But for now, these hopes must be left for a dream.
everyone who speaks of leaving, are the ones who always stay."

These were my favorite lines, very powerful and in a way...true.