Beautiful descriptions. There were some areas in which the flow was a little off but overall, wonderful.

Excellent poem, it was an enjoyable read. I loved the mystery about the poem and the way that you imply that there may be something else to life that we don't see. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

Hye, first of all thank you for your comment. Its much appreciated! :)
Anywyas the description in this poem was amazing. The description catched my attention and drew me in. You kept that grasp of attnetion all throughout the poem. It was excellent. Another thing i really enjoyed was the mystery behind your words... The first 2 stanza's create this beatiful and yet magical feel to the poem, this really draws the reader in. Then the neding was also great as it asks questions which the reader wants to be able to answer, afetr reading the poem people ponder on what the poem was saying. SO yeah amazing job, to improve i suggest you use punctuation as it would help the reader, read the poem the wya you want it to be read. So yeah keep it up! xx

I think the key element here was the choice of words, they were picked really well, and they fit in with the rhyme. I can tell that this piece was thought out very carefully, because it has alot of emotion, and I like the way, it actually leaves me asking questions, because its normally the poems that leave me thinking, which are the ones that I remember.

kaitlynx.

I fall in love with all your poems. Your poems are amazing. This poem is really great. Nice flow and I loved your word choice. well done. 5/5

~Chelsea

Really cool poem this:)