by AlaSkA
Its called a narritave poem.. |
You have very unique writing. Nothing wrong with uniquness. Very well done. Nice sorty behind this. Keep up the great writing! |
by tyanna
Great poem but how does geometry fit into this??? I was assuming the poem was about math lol....Great poem though!! 4/5 |
by Marc Ortiz
Hehehe I thought it was about math :P good poem! I'll give it a 4/5! :) TC |
by Marcus
This poem just left me thinking "What the heck" |
This is impressive. I like to see a poem which isn't always: |
Inferiority complex? it does leave you saying...what? but that's good. but then again, when does anybody actually, truly understand any body else's poems? |
by Goran Rahim
You have created a view, and image in this poem and you have leaved on your readers to decide the path, or to decide what will happen next. |
Nice work, the title kind of threw me on this one, and I'm still not really sure how it fits. But that doesnt really matter. I liked the emotion that you showed it was very sutle and I rarely see that anymore. Amazing flow, and I also loved the fact that you have to look deeper into this poem to be able to understand it, because at first glance you don't get the entire meaning. |
by Melpomene
This was a unique style different but enjoyable to read. An interesting subject you have picked here it definitly was something great to read because it was creative. Well done with this. Good work~mel |
by Kelsea
I really like how you say the rain was working well. I think its a great line, and with the rest of the poem, it adds to the sort of helplessness of the man. It seems to be about pointlessness, but I could be wrong. Its very well done, either way. |
I like it. It's a story that needs to be continued. 5. |