by Dave Apr 10, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
So innocent the young flirt will lust... her perfume in the air; lingering a sweet scent of jasmine and lilac no one to see the first touch. |
by Esther
Dark.... |
To be honest, it was a bit of a bore at the beginning, and i was lost between the first few lines, but as I read on you pulled me in, and that's the way a true poet should be with the reader. Well done. 5/5 |
by Melpomene
I found this poem to be beautifully dark i liked what you did with it. You definitly are an amazing writer and this poem right here shows it. I really enjoy how you can put emotion into the poem and make the reader feel it. Nice work with this poem and i like the structure of it too. |
Like I said. I enjoyed this one alot, I really did. It's a very emotional poem. I did have to read it a couple of times to really get it. =) Keep on writing. And thanks for the comment on mine. I added you to my favorites. =) 5/5 |
by Dave
Ok should be easyer on the eye to go thru now just had to edit the spaceing |