I see what your saying thanks for the comment to tell ya the truth i cut and paste it from my word program where the stanzas were more defined and now that i read it here it does look like a mess thanks for your response

Ok should be easyer on the eye to go thru now just had to edit the spaceing

Like I said. I enjoyed this one alot, I really did. It's a very emotional poem. I did have to read it a couple of times to really get it. =) Keep on writing. And thanks for the comment on mine. I added you to my favorites. =) 5/5
-Ally

I found this poem to be beautifully dark i liked what you did with it. You definitly are an amazing writer and this poem right here shows it. I really enjoy how you can put emotion into the poem and make the reader feel it. Nice work with this poem and i like the structure of it too.
Great job~mel

To be honest, it was a bit of a bore at the beginning, and i was lost between the first few lines, but as I read on you pulled me in, and that's the way a true poet should be with the reader. Well done. 5/5

-Liz-
ps: thank you for your comments on my poetry. =)

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