Great poem!!
i loved the whole theme
a 5/5 from me...ive read one of ur other poems....and i like how u have a strict rhyme scheme and all that
one thing didnt make sense to me though...
"but you're far from a perfect plan"
anyways...good work...

I'm not exactly sure what your speaking about in the poem. What I got out of it was that there was a goodlooking man, but good looks weren't enough for you. Then you kept calling him master which I took to be sourkastic talk. I thought you were talking about you but then you changed it to "but yet she loves him" or somthing like that in the last line. Not sure if you were speaking of yourself or somone else. Never the less and interesting read, the topic idea was a bit fuzzy to understand, but those poems are hard to write and you did a pretty good job! Keep writting, I'm loving your work!

Lol...i'd like to send this to some guy i hate...I liked this one alot too...it was unique and i loved the critisism towards whomever you were talking to...it was pretty much short and too the point...you didn't waste time rambling about how bad they were so it didn't get boring...great work!
Jonda Mullins

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I loved this poem.
It was amazing.

'Yes, master, yes -- I will swoon and obey your every command,
But you better think twice because you have a lot more to prove,
She loves you, though I can't see why, you're a nasty thoughtless man.'
^^ Favorite part of the poem.

You did a great job, I don't quite understand the poem as a whole, only each line by itself.

Another Great Poem.
Keep it up. :]
5/5

When you said long, i expected longer than this...but lenght actually has nothing to go with it...i really liked this rhyme scheme and thought the poem went wel with it...i also really like how instead of writing other line you just repeated the every other line in the last 3 lines:)>..5/5
welll well welll done

"you're a fool of nothing of a man" I think that this line here should have a comma instead of the first "of". I liked this one its the worst feeling in the world when a friend falls for someone who doesnt deserve them, but there really isnt anything that you can do about it, as annoyning as that fact is. What I really liked was how you put this poem under life and called the person master. It had a very different ring to it as opposed to something cruel. And I also liked how in the poem it said that you'd listen while you hate the plan, that shows me that your a good friend because I interperated that to mean that you will stand by and let your friend make her own decisions while you watch, but you will be there for him/her if they ever change their mind. Well done.