She's A Mess Of Insecurities {Trijan Refrain}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Apr 11, 2007


Imperfections are holidays,
And you have got them all,
You're so ugly you're a new faze,
All you can do is crawl.
Spill your secrets, to me I dare,
Even though I don't really care.
....Spill your secrets.
....Spill your secrets.
Spill your secrets to me I dare.

You're so insecure you can't fall,
I'd hate to be your guy.
All you can do is whine and crawl,
I'd rather watch you die.
You are a mess of stupid lies,
A frightening nightmare to the guys.
...You are a mess.
....You are a mess.
You are a mess of stupid lies.

You are far away from perfect --
That's putting it nicely,
You are far from being worth it,
You barely entice me.
You make me sick with infection,
You're a mess of imperfections.
....You make me sick.
....You make me sick.
You make me sick with infection.

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The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line
at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.
The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8

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  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I loved this. I don't know how it is just a 4.9, it should be a 5, lol. Everything about this poem was great, the imagery, the word choice...everything!

    "You are far away from perfect --
    That's putting it nicely,
    You are far from being worth it,"

    ^^ I loved those lines, they really stuck out to me. I felt like I could feel your anger lol. Good job, Hun.

    5.5
    :]
    <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    I really liked this poem it seemed to be based on anger and sometimes angry poems are the best to read. And the title makes me laugh as soon as I finished reading this one. No wonder she's a mess of insecurities I mean when she's being described like that. The only thing I didnt like was the repeating lines. Other than that nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    With your work it always amazes me to see the stanzas played out it is good you are so disiplined to do your work like this. I have always found it hard to be in such boarders but you do it well I gave you a 5 Plot121

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    Again, this is a nice style to write in, and you have great vocabulary. It's very colorful and makes for wonderful poetry. Keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    For some reason.. I thought of Avril Lavgine.

    Mkay.
    I liked it, a lot.
    You used the world crawl in the firs two stanzas, and I hate that word as it is, let alone twice in a poem. :/
    But, the poem was fun to read.
    It like captivated me. Lol.
    And, you did a great job with the first line in each stanza, loved all three of them. :]
    I don't think I could do it, especially that well. Lol.

    You did a great job.
    Keep it up. :]

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