I really, really liked this piece. I like the subject, the concept of moving forward, and the emotions that go along with it. The rythm, however, was definitely off in a couple places. I would suggest that you change the format a bit in lines 1, 6, and the last two. The poem itself was still beautiful though, and the words were captivating. I especially liked lines 5 and 7, they were lovely. Great read

What kind of a loser insults rythm >.>...i liked it nicole! lol actually yeah ...the beats a little off :P

Hey nicole, I just re-read your changes and the rythm suits the poem much better. It's a lovely piece, nice work