Disturbed

If you made this longer and put more emotion in it it would be a really great poem, when poems are short and they have too much repetition then it gets a little annoying, but everyone likes to use repetition sometimes, really think about adding onto it, it's great so far

~brittany (MD)

I kinda liked it. The way I interpreted it, you state an event "when i..." then you are state the emotion it invokes "disturbed". You left a post "do i suck" or something like that. Give it time. You're young. I don't even like to read my old stuff because of how bad it was.