by Mommy And Me Apr 11, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Falling she sees |
Hun, you need to either capitalize all of the lines, or don't capitalize any..well, you don't HAVE to..but it looks much neater and more oganized if you do. Another thing, some grammar could really bring this piece out..."Falling she caress" Caress to caresses? ... |
by aDORKable x3
Amazing! You keep suprising me with your work. You rarely rhyme and it's great the way you write! I love your style and your words! Great job!! |
by tyanna
This is a wonderfully written poem!! It brought a tear to my eye!!! |