Good poem. This was very sad. But well written.
Well done. 5/5

:Sarah:

Wow-that's pretty powerful. A lot of people don't realize how often people go through this. Hardhitting and lovely. Thanks for sharing.

I'm sorry to hear that you went/are going through that. It's a very powerful poem though. A lot of emotion of pain and anger, expressed really well. The flow was good and the word use was appropriate for the poem. Well done hun. =] 5/5

Tammie

Hey i liked this poem..it had a deep and sad meaning and i liked your choice of words, they were really...precise.
keep it up =]
nuff luv x

Things that where not true.
^ Should be 'were' not 'where'

Awh, this was really sadd. I like it though, the descriptions were simple but good, the flow worked pretty well, and the emotion was clear. I think if you use one rhyme you should rhyme the whole way through but thats just my opinion. I like the dashes in the last line, nice literary effect. Nicely done though hun. 5/5

Liked it!!

Wow this is amazing! A Really good job on this hun.

=) x