Ok just a few things:

1st stanza:
3rd line, I think you wanted to say "no tienen" because you wanted to say THEY do not have pain, instead of I do not have pain, right?

3rd stanza:
If you wanted to say I love the freedom, you should say "Me gusta (muchisimo) la libertidad or liberdad (i cant remember) because the phrase "yo te quiero" means I love you.

Also, just double check your spelling with "histerico" and "pordria" (podria)

Other than that, excellent effort, you did a good job and it has a beautiful meaning. btw, just some tips with accents and tildes:

ñ = press ALT down and with it being pressed down type in 164
á = ALT160
í = ALT161
ó = ALT162
ú = ALT163

:) Props!

So true that love is only pain-well for the most part.As for desiring to be pretty like the other girls...why?you'd have to fight over the same men haha anyways good poem