Uhm why is this voted a 3? i really dont understand. this poem was really beautifully i loved the flow and the ryhme scheme was flawless. This truely is an amazing short poem with alot of emotion shown throughout it. Good job with this 5/5 much deserving.~mel

Because of some envy people....so don't mind
And really filled with love and so beatiful penned
Good job with this
Keep it up
Laura

I agree- a three? This poem is great! ^^ Especially for a short one, considering it's hard to capture so much emotion in so few words. Can't wait to see more from you!

Good for a short one, but doesnt say anything out of the norm for an erotic/love making poem. try to be uniquie with every writing you make. good overall though.

4/Tom

This poem is another great one, full of romance, i like how it flow greatly and the rhyme as well,
in such a short poem you said alot that touched my heart....
you are very talented dear.
keep it up

Ooh, I really liked this, very errotic. Maybe you should put it into the explicit seciton though. I loved the descriptions and imagery in this, you painted a very detailed picture. I also liked how it was very simple but full of meaning. The flow was good and it had a nice feel to it. Nicely done. 5/5

Awesome that is amazing such passion
great job

brittany(MD)

Hey,
First of all im really osrry for the late comment, i was really busy and when i acctually sat and read the poem i couldnt leave a comment as i had to go. Anyways about the poem, i kinda think this shoulkd be in the explicit section rather then love.. Anyways your word usage has excellent discription and creates clear imagery. To improve the poem i thought you should of used better punctuation and enjambment in some places. Other then that a great peom! Keep writing! xx

Hot passion that is.
tis an adoration in a mixed up twisted way.
ha ecstasy it is, the greatest ecstacy of them all. 5/5 love.

You described everything quite nicely in the poem, and used some great adjectives. The flow was a it off at the very end, but it's tied together quite nicely, so itdoesn't matter. :)