I thought this was very nicely written and the vocab and rhyming was original...very well done.
I think the last line of the last stanza kindof threw me off...cause it seemed a bit out of rythm...but then again..i dont know how you read it in ur head so i shouldnt judge that...
otherwise...i thought it was very professionally done and i loved it:)

It was kinda violent lmao in a hot sexy way tho lol sex is just sex unless it's with somebody that you care so much about, it becomes far more then that. amazing write 5/5

You're truly skilled to be able to write such a good poem with such a simple rhyme scheme. I love the second stanza best, it has much class.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]