by Marcus Apr 12, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
This still needs a lot of work.. |
by Espoirfailed
This is amazingly clever, and extremely beautiful. i am not religious in the slightest but i thought the use of the biblical phrases in this were outstanding. i also loved the title and the last two lines because they were intelligent and witty but also meaningful. |
by Teria
Out of the poems I've read, I think this is your best so far. I liked how you repeated " Lead us not into tempation" and then related it to things in the bible. They say the bible is love, eh. So, it kinda went with the poem. :D |
by Gem
I just noticed that typo too, lol |
by Tricky Daze
It's really sweet and cute...so sweet wording and good flow...but there is just a thing in the last line |
by Nicole
5/5 for something that needs work its off to a great start. keep it up i like what i've read |