by Gem
This made me almost cry when you gave it to me. It's unlike anything i've read from you. |
Awww that is such a sweet and cute poem, gem is one luckyyy girl |
by Mezmeryz
Wow...the words are so beautiful!! and thats the first word that come tomy mind when i read it! and every stanza adds to the whole beauty of the poem! great imagery, a true masterpiece! |
by Nikki
Liked it |
This is a great start for the poem. |
by Nicole
5/5 for something that needs work its off to a great start. keep it up i like what i've read |
by Tricky Daze
It's really sweet and cute...so sweet wording and good flow...but there is just a thing in the last line |
by Gem
I just noticed that typo too, lol |
by Teria
Out of the poems I've read, I think this is your best so far. I liked how you repeated " Lead us not into tempation" and then related it to things in the bible. They say the bible is love, eh. So, it kinda went with the poem. :D |
by Espoirfailed
This is amazingly clever, and extremely beautiful. i am not religious in the slightest but i thought the use of the biblical phrases in this were outstanding. i also loved the title and the last two lines because they were intelligent and witty but also meaningful. |