Comments : You're Mine

  • 17 years ago

    by Dead Inside

    Beautifully written. I'm normally used to reading longer poems but this one is still really good. Keep on writing

    cesar

  • 17 years ago

    by CHOKE

    Wow lovely really :D
    i quite adored it!
    5/5 love.

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    I like the short sweet simplicity of it. magnific!

    <3

  • 17 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!
    so sweet and true. it got to the point and was short and very sweet. =D Nice flow. I ,3 the last stanza.

  • 16 years ago

    by TwistedAngel xx

    Excellent poem.
    I love it when they are short, sweet and to the point.
    I mean long poems are nice to but sometimes you can express it so much better with less words.

    "Shudder from your touch.
    These emotions,
    They are just
    Too much"

    ^^^
    Yup, sometimes that is how I feel with my fiance, and it is a nice feeling to have, well usually. great portrayal of emotions there.

    "I feel the urge:
    The fire and heat.
    I need your kiss:
    Delicious and sweet."

    ^^^
    haha OH I have to agree on that one as well. Sometimes you get those urges and nothing will satisfy you except them. can totally relate to that. well done with that section.

    "Shiver down my spine
    From the way you
    Simply say
    'You're mine.' "

    ^^^
    The ending? Perfect. It was a great poem and I get that happy with my boy as well. Knowing he is mine and no one elses.

    great poem
    I said it already but it is

    well done
    ^_^