by Romancing the Darker Side Apr 13, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Dearest Gravestone, |
Simple words and short choppy flow go nicely together as it is proved in this poem... my only suggestion is in this line "Without adding much pride" when you read it, it seems like it has too many syllabels, maybe you could take out the word "adding" :D |