Well written and calm tone, while staying emotionaly focused. i like it. alot of freindships are
tested when it comes to relationships.

5/tom

Wow, this poem just touched my heart, how nicely you described something that exactly i can relate to............... I like the use of the word (A LIE) how it can destroy many things.........including friendship, love and far behind.
truly a well deserved 5/5 poem........ you are very talented.

Ooh, this was very intense and a little confusing. The flow was pretty good as were your descriptions. The emotion was very strong and that really shone through in the poem. Although not all of the rhymes worked perfectly they were pretty good. Nicely done hun. 4/5

Aww such a sad poem
=/ broken friendships hurt
i dunno what else to say

brittany (MD)

I can't really relate with this poem. BUT it is a very good poem. It told a story within. I could feel what the girl was going through. Very good job. 5/5

Omg!! your poem is really good and have good choices of word and of course also powerful .. thanks for the comment!! btw added u to my favs!! good job 5/5

Very good peom, I loved the flow and it well written and well structured, good job.

Best wishes
Wallace

Great poem. The flow was excellent and the rhyming wasn't forced.
A lot of emotion was shown.
Keep it up 5/5

|Sarah|

Awesome poem, I got confused in the beginning but I got it at the end, love poems like that, anyways, the flow was great, nice rhythm. Oh yea...

"She spoke to her foregoing friend,
And confessed why they had to end.
"I felt horrible about what it was I did,
But your boyfriend wanted what I had to give."

On the third line, in my opinion, you should take off "it was" and just have it..

"I felt horrible about what I did,"

Well thats all I got. Great poem. 5/5

This is a great poem. The flow and rhyming was perfect. It was a great read. 5/5

Kalee

Lol, wow! that surprise ending just twisted everything i was thinking in the beginning. complete adoration for this one love! quite a jigsaw puzzle, eh? 5/5.

Wow, this is really amazing, really liked your choice of words and the way you expressed whole incident. Great write indeed

all the best and take care

This is very heartfelt, and quite sad. You tell the story very nicely, and while I wish some of your wording could have been a bit more developed, this was a nice poem.

*awesome poem! loved it, i can relate so closely and i really admire how you connected with me!! thank u for posting, and thanks for asking me to comment or i would never have read it!! xxx

You did a very good job of writing this poem, and i think alot of people can relate to the story that you tell in it. The fact that you told the story with such a steady rythm and a simple yet enjoyable rhyming scheme makes it all the better. Great job hun. loved it alot =)

Excellent poem i think most people can relate to this poem we have all been there before,anyway i enjoyed it well done 10-10

Excellent poem i think most people can relate to this poem we have all been there before,anyway i enjoyed it well done 10-10

Technically speaking, I find it hard to read. The flow was rather unsteady as I stumbled on several lines and stanzas. Stanza 2 seems to be misplaced, and should be transferred in the latter part of the poem.

On the whole, this was a fine piece of work. [Once enhanced and improved, the better.] I believe this piece can correlate with people's experiences. So do the people who have "broken friendships." Reading this makes me want to shudder, it's traumatically horrid to remember some of my memories...
Well done upon writing this poem. Good job.
Keep on writing what you feel and like. all the best and take care.
Debbie

My apologies, I in no way to offend... I was just being honest, like what you asked in your thread.
Peace much.

This poem delivered a lot of emotion, while my guess is it was good therapy for you to get this of your chest so to speak. The quotes made it seem more real. Some readers have a problem with redundant “ands” and they are easily replaced by more imaginative words like “while “and “as” but that is the authors choice. All in all, the poem flowed nicely and got the point across