Ohh this was very fabulous work for me i love the way u write in this poetry... actually it captivate me at first line so i read it twice... its very enjoyable i think flow was so great and i carried away.... very great job... keep it up! 5/5

The visuals are well done. You might want to let go of the rigid rhymes in places. One wouldn't normally say "last day on this LAND" or "it's her body someone will FIND" or "getting involved in such strife". Better to sacrifice the rhyme than to settle for a word that isn't quite right

Ohhh wow that is so scary, great poem though, very different from all the others i've read, makes it really stand out

great job

brittany (MD)