by Wallace
Nice poem, there could be some changs however. eg. 'and bugs are skidish and want to be let be' If you changed that last 'be' to 'free' then it would be better, and also the flow in the last few lines went off, which was surprising because it started out so good. But goodtry though. |
by Karissa
Like Miranda, I love this poem as well. =] |