Endless

by TotaMariee   Apr 13, 2007


I lay in the darkness
begging,that i'll justfade away
wondering what would happen
if i were to end my pain

Suicidal thoughts, run through my head
Continuous tears, run down my face
Why do i keep holding on?

I cut my wrist
and watch it bleed
they say my pain will pass
.....but scars will never fade....

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  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Tips/Mistaes/Pointers:
    lye - not a word..... lay? maybe?
    justfade - just fade
    Suicidle - suicidal

    And basicly.. try some new topics. this poem has no depth. at all. why do you feel this way? what the reason. give some information to make the reader INTERESTED. there are a million poems on here the same as this, clones basicly.

    i am sory i have to say this.. but its true, and better you hear it now then when you try to enter this in a conest and get humiliated.

    Revisit emotions, memories, family, friends. and write poems with substance.

    x.o Lauren

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