Forever And More

by Sydney   Apr 14, 2007


Everything in this world
seems to go wrong
How does one move on
when it all becomes a race?

God, its just so hard
All I need is space

Time to think
Time to weep
I must clear my mind
before I speak

I hold my breath,
hoping to die
Then I see a light
Its in his eyes

I can tell what he feels
He may not love me,
but i know whats real

He will always be
more of a friend
and that I may only need

He cares for me and I know
I will,
Forever And More

(Ha. My flows way off and I acknowledge it lol. I have my faults XD. But this was one of my very first poems and means a lot to me because it was about my friend who i fell hard for. My little fairy tale XD. Of course he and I are still the closest of friends but this was my way of letting go and moving on)

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  • 17 years ago

    by Corruption

    I thought it was good
    through yeah the flow was perfect
    it was still interesting to read
    i liked it
    thx for the comments
    and yeah the rest is coming
    after i get a few more comments lol

    Keenan

  • 17 years ago

    by Beauty In The Breaking

    Hehehe Ok, since you already admitted it I won't say anything lol All in all I loved it and hope that you two stay close friends for life =) Another 5 =)
    Rhea

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Well there's some... but still great! most important for me u write it from the bottom of ur heart i really appreciate and i thankful that u shared ur poems w/us... just keep on writing ok!

  • 17 years ago

    by tyanna

    Hummmm..Well the flow was a little off...Maybe if you just rearranged it into a rhyme scheme...Maybe rearrange some of the words too..I don't have any suggestions as to how you could do this though..sorry..Great starter piece though!! I think you could turn this into a great write with a little fixing...Best of luck!! 4/5
    Tyanna

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