I nominated this for the weekly poetry contest too. just so you know. =] thats how much i loved it. =P

I always tried writing a poem like this, but never could. You did a wonderful job with the emotions and depth. Good work.. really.

4.5/5

This poem was really good.
i can realate to it very well.

Leader of the honor roll board, she looks so sweet,
Standing there smiling with the braces along her teeth,
And she hears them all laugh as she walks on by,
Hiding the crystal tears lining her green eyes.
And holding the gun in her hand she shakes,
As she frees herself from all of her mistakes,
Her mother cries as she holds the body close,
Cursing to herself for the life that she chose.

Head cheerleader, with her chin held up high,
Smiles to cover all of the anger she hides inside,
But late at night on the edge of her bed,
She holds a razor blade to calm her pounding head.
Blood drips down in the middle of the night,
As words slip through the walls from her parents fight.
Holding her pillow close, she cries herself to sleep,
Praying to God, her tattered soul to keep.

these stanza has alot of meaning.
hope we stay in touch
take care
emmeline

AMAZING... What else do i need to say? Best poem written by you. Keep up the wonderful job

AMAZING... What else do i need to say? Best poem written by you. Keep up the wonderful job

I love this...the whole concept and idea of this piece is beautiful and original.
The imagery you created in this piece is amazing, it simply blew me away.
The depth and emotion you put into this is clear for the reader to see, and the word choice and rhyming are enjoyable...I love it.

Wow... I'm speechless. I haven't read something so powerful in a while. Whole story behind this poem is so real, I know a lot of people that act at the exact same way, and you put it all in the poem excellently. Whole piece is very deep, and the imagery that you created in it is vivid and captivating. Every line holds a lot of emotions and images, and this is one of those poems that are so hard to forget.
The ending stanza is also excellent, with the atmosphere filled with sadness.
Flow of the whole poem is great, too.
All in all, truly superb piece, very unique and meaningful.
The last stanza is my favorite, it brought the tears in my eyes.
Keep up, 5/5 from me!
You are very talented poet.

That was beautiful, amazing, and truely touching.
5/5

I LOVE this poem because it screams truth and reality. Things that some people forget to see until it's thrown into their face sometimes.
I have to say that my school does not have the whole defined clique thing..or the prettiest girl the hottest guy..but I can still relate to this poem. Even the most beutiful and perfect people on the outside can be broken and bleeding on the inside. That is the sad truth of this life.
The ending sums it up perfectly. The amount of teenagers I have this desperately hurting this way is almost scary..and very very sad. Beautiful poem. =] I enjoyed reading this a lot.
--Viola

Great poem incredible emotion perfect flow everything on point you did an exellent job keep it up 5/5

I live this life, to an extent. thanks for portraying the life of an almost freshman